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 The Tree...

Joined: Thu Jul 04, 2013 4:31 am
Posts: 422
Thu Dec 01, 2016 2:40 am

Here's a poem I wrote, I hope you like it. It means a lot to me and I really want to share it. I was inspired greatly to make this.


I am a tree
For I stand, strong and wonderful
With a glance you see beautiful leaves
And a great brown trunk
With a glance you determine my species
You look at the acorns and animals surrounding me
Fallen leaves when I am upon Fall
But I stand, great and mighty
Hard roots and bark knock you back
Sometimes I wither
But I grow back
I look up to the sky and face the day
It's a surprise you don't know me in any way
Like an onion, I have layers
If you cut me open you will find
Circles and circles of a strange rind
Completely different from what I am outside
But the only time you can cut me off
Is when you catch one of my branches that fall
That is only a piece of me
For I am a great, giant tree
When I wilt you ignore the white
The color my bark turns as I fight
When water finally comes I am free again
But I am wilting inside, slow and painful
I am a tree
You think you have me all figured out
But you are quite wrong
I know you have your doubts.

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