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 The Unmagical Sister

Joined: Fri Sep 04, 2015 3:18 pm
Posts: 16
Mon Sep 28, 2015 5:56 pm

I'm only 10 years old, but I'm posting my fantasy story.

Long ago, there was a girl named Mabel. Her sisters were Violet, Zoe, and Mya. Violet, Zoe, and Mya had magic, but Mabel did not. Mabel’s sisters took her to Cloud Kingdom one day to find out if she has magic. “Do I have magic?” Mabel asked

“Yes, just keep believing in your dreams.” The Cloud Queen answered

Once they got back home, Mabel tried to believe in her dreams.

“It’s no use!” Mabel complained

“Well, you’re an orphan, a vampire, and a Goth.” Mabel’s mom said

Mabel gasped. How her parents could lie about who she is and tell the truth?  

“No, this just can’t be!” Mabel screamed  

Mabel ran out the door and went to her friend’s house.

“Why?” Janie asked

Mabel could hear Janie’s heartbeat. She tried to bite Janie until the Vampire Trapper came in.

“NOOOOOO!” Mabel screamed

“I’m putting you in my lab where you belong!” The Vampire Trapper said

Mabel bit The Vampire Trapper until he died.

“YES!” Mabel said

The sun was coming up. The sun made it hard for Mabel to see. Mabel went up and up and up. She lived past the excitation of vampires. Therefore, if you look for her, she’ll jump out the air.  Her hometown was California.

 Re: The Unmagical Sister

Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Fri Dec 11, 2015 12:33 am

cool story, I like it

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