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 THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Sun Apr 08, 2012 12:48 am
Posts: 25
Sun Apr 15, 2012 4:40 pm

PROLOGUE

As Cassie passed Mrs. Fieldman's all-grey house, which her husband had been trying to paint light blue for years, it reminded her of her life. To her, her life was completly BORING. As she walked she thought about her family and her friends. She had thought alot about running away but then she always thought "Will this change my problems?" and the answer is always "No". Cassie knew magic wasn't real,but right then she didn't care. So she made a wish. A wish that said, "On June 5th this summer, somthing will happen that will change my life."

When Cassie walked through her front gate she told herself ,"Cassie, that was a stupid thing to wish for".

But what was coming in store was NOT stupid. -EK

 

 




 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Sat May 26, 2012 12:27 pm
Posts: 6
Tue May 29, 2012 12:59 pm
Great! I know you did this a while ago but can you continue? Sounds cool. You seriously have talent!



 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Fri Dec 25, 2009 9:19 pm
Posts: 452
Sun Jun 24, 2012 7:51 pm
That was good, but kind of short for a prologue. Maybe this would be an excerpt as in on the back of the book or something. Another thing is when you put, "BORING" that is not the best thing to do in terms of writing. Sounds pretty good though! ~Ella



 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Sun Apr 08, 2012 12:48 am
Posts: 25
Fri Jul 06, 2012 8:21 pm
Thanks so much "Midsummersparrow5" I REALLY appreciate it!!!!!!!!!!!!!



 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Thu Jun 07, 2012 8:56 pm
Posts: 37
Mon Jul 09, 2012 5:02 pm
Wow! I think that was pretty cool! It sounds like something I would want to read. It makes me ask questions, like, "Why June 5th? :) I love this!! I can't wait to read more. ;)



 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Sun Apr 08, 2012 12:48 am
Posts: 25
Sat Jul 21, 2012 3:56 pm
YAAAAAYYYYY! thanks 4 all your great replies!!



 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Tue Oct 23, 2012 8:04 pm
Posts: 12
Tue Oct 23, 2012 8:20 pm
Wow. Keep writing it! This has me so interested....post more! You are a really talented writer. I can't wait to see what happens next.



 Re: THE WISH (Prologue)
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Joined: Sun Apr 08, 2012 12:48 am
Posts: 25
Fri Dec 07, 2012 9:25 pm
THX everyone!



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