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 this is a story im working on. PLEASE...
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Joined: Sat Sep 12, 2015 6:32 pm
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Mon Sep 14, 2015 9:44 am


Virtually everyone jenna ran into got killed that is untill she met Catsu Marioda. Catsu told her things only her closest friends knew. then he asked her if she knew where they had  met... he was the man fm her parnets funaral he told her to leave and never come back            




 Re: this is a story im working on. PLEASE...
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Joined: Sat Sep 12, 2015 6:32 pm
Posts: 32
Wed Sep 23, 2015 12:10 pm

Jenna told her only still living friend (also he is an angel he has a HUGE crush on her ) Kash what had happend this was there conversation.

"hey  Jen whats wrong"

"Kash??"

"yea"

"Catsu is back"

"Let me go tll Zara she'll know what to do"

"j"

"yea"

" I need for you to promise me you wont leave " 

"ok"

"I promse "

thats all for know..... see yu  later .... plz  commentyesnobroken heartheartcryinglaughsurprisesmiley also you are free to add things  or post your ideas thx




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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Tue Jun 28, 2016 5:43 am

But WHY?

Why did he come back?

I didn't know.

I only knew that he was back for a no good reason.

What can I do?

 

Very short, but sweet. Hope this is good!

-Dragoncrown485




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Joined: Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am
Posts: 17
Tue Apr 18, 2017 1:24 pm

But how did Kash come back from Heaven? Other than that this is a nice story! cool




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