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was it good?
Poll ended at Sun Nov 16, 2014 11:54 pm
it cloud be a bestseller! 50%  50%  [ 1 ]
nah 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
ok 50%  50%  [ 1 ]
not at all!!!!! 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Total votes : 2
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 untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Oct 11, 2014 10:31 pm
Posts: 19
Wed Oct 29, 2014 11:54 pm

where your done reading it please recamend a tittle thanks! wink

                         chapter 1 

 

I woke up to the crackling voice of the radio. "Children sixteen or younger please report to Murkwire City hall Quickly." After that I took a shower and got dressed in my purple long sleeve shirt with my brown foral knee length skirt. When I got there there was a long line. there I read a sing that said: ALL girls must wear long sleeve shirts with knee length skirts.That was usally commen. Girls did not have that much freedom in the socitey. After that I saw girls who didn't follow the rules. they got in big trouble with the socitey. Even their families were in danger of being banished to the hungerlands. people there got torchered. My uncle got sent thier. He didn't make it. Those who survied got a chance to return to the socitey. But should people be free?                                                                                                                                                                                                                  I am only in 4th gradecheeky




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Oct 11, 2014 10:31 pm
Posts: 19
Mon Nov 03, 2014 10:51 pm

Please reply I need feedback I'm already done with chapter 12! cool




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sun Nov 09, 2014 7:00 pm
Posts: 83
Sun Dec 07, 2014 4:56 am

Wow youre in 4th grade I am too! Great story so far! Buuuut could you tell me where the OTHER chapters are?angel




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Oct 11, 2014 10:31 pm
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Wed Dec 10, 2014 12:36 am

 that was really 3 chaptersblush my hand slipped and hit the keys and hit enter so it was a typo. but I'm glad you liked smiley




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sun Nov 09, 2014 7:00 pm
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Thu Dec 11, 2014 12:47 am

so where are they?




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Tue Mar 11, 2014 1:51 am
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Sat Dec 13, 2014 3:53 am

Hi! My username may be different,but its still me! Ok let me explain.This was my 1st profile,but I forgot my password! :(  So I created aquakitten. Until now, I havent been able to remember my password. But today I suddenly did!!! :D So yeah, just so you know, I might reply as a cat OR a kitten ! ;)




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Oct 11, 2014 10:31 pm
Posts: 19
Fri Dec 26, 2014 3:47 am

Re: aqua cat 1451

oh I have them in my notebook ll'l keep posting as long as I get more then 10 comments cheeky




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Dec 13, 2014 4:50 pm
Posts: 7
Wed Apr 01, 2015 4:56 pm

I LOVED IT!!!!! THE WHOLE IDEA WAS PERFECT!!!! PLZ KEEP WRITING IT...

~ Bonnie (loneangel35) ~




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Tue Apr 07, 2015 11:29 pm
Posts: 2
Thu May 07, 2015 11:37 pm

i love it!heartmakes me wonder if she will survive .smileykeep on the good work!




 Re: untied but please read it
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Joined: Tue Jan 13, 2015 8:16 pm
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Fri May 08, 2015 8:29 pm

hi,

i read that book tooit was so,so,intresting




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sun May 17, 2015 4:39 pm
Posts: 112
Sun May 17, 2015 10:48 pm

Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase post the rest of the chapters. I really mean it.




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Wed May 27, 2015 9:36 pm
Posts: 1
Wed May 27, 2015 10:21 pm

;) winksmileyyou'll be a great book maker




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Fri Aug 01, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 48
Tue Sep 01, 2015 3:43 am

heres a title if u need one. freedom by society meaning that its the society that wants girls to wear the skirts and long sleeve shirts. also they want freedom from that and their own rights. hope that kinda makes sense. the story? its pretty good, but, is that already three chapters? 




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Oct 11, 2014 10:31 pm
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Sun Oct 04, 2015 2:37 pm

@crazymonkey this is only the frirst chapter. there are two more chapters if you want to read them. anyways glad i could help!!! smiley




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Tue Oct 13, 2015 3:41 pm
Posts: 1
Tue Oct 13, 2015 3:48 pm

As a high school student, this is a really good piece of writing for someone as young as you! The only things that you may want to consider are spell-cecking, and writing longer chapters, if you really want this story to be a novel. Good luck with all future writing!




 Re: untitled but it's really good please read
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Joined: Sat Oct 11, 2014 10:31 pm
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Sat Dec 05, 2015 5:15 pm

@crimsoncat601 Thanks for the feedback it really helps! smiley

 




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