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 What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
regular_visitor

Joined: Tue Mar 30, 2010 5:51 pm
Posts: 179
Thu Aug 26, 2010 6:11 pm
Some people think you can't pick a fight
To live a very successful life.
Some think you can sit and watch CSI:
But, man you got no alibi,
you can't sit there and not move,
and spend your life watching the tube.
You have to get up, go out,
and live your life without a doubt.
Some people think your career is your life,
and that it's filled with stress and strife.
Some people think it's about clothes,
some people think it's how far you go,
how good your grades are,
how many scars
you have it doesn't matter
but wait 'til you go and climb up the ladder.
'Cause when you reach the top
And you have to stop
You've reached the end
And you realize you can't mend
All the mistakes you've made,
in the one life you had played.
And here lies the end of my rhyme
Live your life to the fullest while there is still time.



 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Tue Mar 02, 2010 6:45 pm
Posts: 277
Fri Jan 21, 2011 6:03 pm
It rhymes mostly towards the end, but I like it. :robothappy:

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 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)

Joined: Sat May 29, 2010 2:55 pm
Posts: 2
Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:27 pm
:womantongue:u did good


_Crazydog7410_ wrote:
Some people think you can't pick a fight
To live a very successful life.
Some think you can sit and watch CSI:
But, man you got no alibi,
you can't sit there and not move,
and spend your life watching the tube.
You have to get up, go out,
and live your life without a doubt.
Some people think your career is your life,
and that it's filled with stress and strife.
Some people think it's about clothes,
some people think it's how far you go,
how good your grades are,
how many scars
you have it doesn't matter
but wait 'til you go and climb up the ladder.
'Cause when you reach the top
And you have to stop
You've reached the end
And you realize you can't mend
All the mistakes you've made,
in the one life you had played.
And here lies the end of my rhyme
Live your life to the fullest while there is still time.



:womanwink:

_Crazydog7410_ wrote:
Some people think you can't pick a fight
To live a very successful life.
Some think you can sit and watch CSI:
But, man you got no alibi,
you can't sit there and not move,
and spend your life watching the tube.
You have to get up, go out,
and live your life without a doubt.
Some people think your career is your life,
and that it's filled with stress and strife.
Some people think it's about clothes,
some people think it's how far you go,
how good your grades are,
how many scars
you have it doesn't matter
but wait 'til you go and climb up the ladder.
'Cause when you reach the top
And you have to stop
You've reached the end
And you realize you can't mend
All the mistakes you've made,
in the one life you had played.
And here lies the end of my rhyme
Live your life to the fullest while there is still time.






 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)

Joined: Mon May 30, 2011 4:11 pm
Posts: 13
Wed Aug 31, 2011 5:18 pm
man, who are you, and where did you come from? i need to get one of you for my essays!!! just kidding (but i kinda was serious)



 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)

Joined: Tue Oct 25, 2011 3:47 pm
Posts: 144
Wed Jun 06, 2012 10:58 pm
ohhh, you rhymed 'rhyme' with 'time', like 'in the end'.



 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Mon May 07, 2012 8:04 pm
Posts: 41
Thu Jul 26, 2012 6:01 pm
I liked it!



 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Sat Jul 21, 2012 1:55 pm
Posts: 435
Fri Nov 30, 2012 9:18 am
Nice...
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-Taylor Swift, Safe and Sound.

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 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Fri Dec 28, 2012 5:09 pm
Posts: 2
Fri Dec 28, 2012 7:38 pm
i really like rap thank you for writting it for the poeple who dont know what is out there and how much they are wasting there life :) from:beepink306



 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Mon Apr 15, 2013 4:47 pm
Posts: 11
Thu Sep 05, 2013 3:26 pm
awesome



 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Wed Dec 10, 2014 6:06 pm
Posts: 1
Wed Dec 17, 2014 5:43 pm

okay and thanks and i like ur rap




 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Sat Jan 02, 2016 2:22 am
Posts: 26
Sat Jan 02, 2016 2:53 am

 VERY COOL YOU SHOULD MAKE ONE ABOUT KIDS GOING ON THE RIGHT PATH




 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
new

Joined: Sun Feb 28, 2016 3:59 am
Posts: 2
Sun Feb 28, 2016 4:07 am

What is life when you think you don't have it ? What is life when you think you have it when you are sick ? What is life when your mom is sick? What is is life when you, think your sister  is not well? What us life when your head hurts?What is it?




 Re: What is Life? (A Rap I made Up)
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Joined: Thu May 12, 2016 2:05 pm
Posts: 52
Tue May 24, 2016 12:05 pm

That.Is.AWESOME! surprise




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