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 When the Sun goes down.
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Joined: Sat Feb 27, 2016 3:10 pm
Posts: 68
Fri Mar 25, 2016 7:58 pm

                                                 When the Sun Goes Down

                                                                                                 by GhostWolf1798

When the Sun goes down,                

I look at the sky,

The Moon and the stars twinkle,

In the night.

I see a flash,

of glitter and shine,

It's the fireflies stealing the show.

As the night goes by,

Over the horison,

I see Sun,

Bold as it could be.

Knowing I have to go,

I say good bye,

They wink and say, 

See you when the Sun does Down.




 Re: When the Sun goes down.
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Joined: Sat Dec 12, 2015 1:21 am
Posts: 13
Sun Apr 10, 2016 12:54 am

Can I use your peoms for books




 Re: When the Sun goes down.
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Joined: Fri Aug 01, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 48
Mon May 30, 2016 10:57 pm

THAT WAS AMAZING!!! 10/10!!! The best thing about it was that you ended it the same way you started it, which can be tricky, but you did it perfectly :)




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