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 Winter Storm. hope you like it!

Joined: Tue Dec 23, 2014 1:22 am
Posts: 209
Sat Apr 25, 2015 6:27 pm

this is just a prolouge. i can take it if you say it's terrible:

“The procedure is complete. We need to wake her up.”


“We can’t risk that, Lily. We need to let her wake up on her own.”


“Max she needs to know what we gave her!”


“If you wake her up she could freeze you!” Despite the warning the woman touches her daughter and turns to ice.


“Lily!” The man touches his wife and also turns to ice.




“Run Jack!Take Jasmine with you!”


“Mom, What’s going on?”


“They found us and think your father and I are traitors. You need to get out of here, change your name, and your looks. Pretend you don’t have powers!” I break out in a full sprint, and run away with my sister Jasmine.


 Re: Winter Storm. hope you like it!

Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Tue May 03, 2016 12:18 am

very interesting, I like it. What's the main character's name?

 Re: Winter Storm. hope you like it!

Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Thu May 12, 2016 5:30 pm

I think it's good. But you ought to write some more.

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