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 Wrote this for a poetry class...Won an award

Joined: Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am
Posts: 4
Thu Jun 08, 2017 2:21 am

I don't see what's so great about it, but here it is (it's called a jar of water poem) 

The Jar of Water

  1. The sound of ice

as it plops

into the

filled glass



ll.   The rise and fall

of water

is as

rhythmic as the

fetal heartbeat

of a child,




lll.   A waterfall hitting the 


strong, and splashing



lV.   The peaceful 


of ocean waves,


gently over the shore.



V.   “Slosh!” it agrees,

as it pushes against the 

sides of its prison

waiting, and

hoping for

a chance of escape.



Vl.   So sounds the water

in a simple

glass jar:


plopping, splooshing,


crashing, calming


Please tell me what you think!

 Re: Wrote this for a poetry class...Won an award

Joined: Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am
Posts: 1
Fri Jun 09, 2017 2:16 pm

That's so goood !!! I've won a lot of awards too but that's a lot better than mine!laugh

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